So chapter 3 is up on Alvika. I finally got my first true critque, and I'm both happy and perplexed. My reader says that they've "read all my works." and is a "big fan" and yet still don't understand how my stories go, relating to what she critiques on. The comment that my story isn't original is funny, since originality simply molds to the writer. Just because my story isn't up to an originality par just yet, doesn't mean I can't take drastic changes. It is only chapter 3 after all. For someone who's such a fan, I had to laugh at the comment about lack of emotional depth and character structures. Yes, in any form of fictional/non-fictional work, order dictates that you should discribe your characters thuroughly upon entrance into the story. Doing that on every story however is boring, and "un-original", so I've opted to leave the reader guessing some until such time that I feel it a more unique moment to explain her. This particular work is to be deoid of emotional contructs for a little while as well. It's going to add to some of the focuses I'm placing, just as I did in a past story. Meh. Dunno why I felt the need to defend myself, but I did, now it's over, woohoo. As for chapter three, please do read. Let me know what you think.
http://www.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=2192751

I'm still in desire for some in depth critiques, anything but the grammer. I know my grammer is crud.
--Little Reverb